Monday, February 21, 2011

'round 8 o'clock

you there-
would your lips
twitch up a tune
if
i cracked
a cheddar grin?
-thyme aged, bold
would your hips
swing round
if
i slapped on Coltrane 'n Davis
- a few of my favorite things,
placed a sea salt cracker
on your tongue
would you
join me in depth of lung
or
spit me out, long steeped chai-
without asking
why?
the blush in your glass,
my cheek-
of plum and pear

still won't smile?
i can wait-
and make it worth my while.


~ Jenica M. Corbett (February 11, 2011) ~

3 comments:

  1. your blending of food, music, and interaction give a different imagery to senses than we are used to. hospitality, sharing what we enjoy with others, and the attempt of a reaction from someone else are all present with a staggered beat that seems to to reflect the nature of asking such questions and the playfulness of the interaction.

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  2. food in and of itself is an enormous challenge to write about, namely because we sense it with so many things. you've got a great handle on balancing words on taste, sight, touch, smell.
    i dig this.

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  3. Love the way this poem plays with the senses--food, music, relationships.

    Use a dash (2 hyphens) instead of a single hyphen to clarify those breaks.

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